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Inspiration Monday- Be Kind ReWrite

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Not much was significant about the lamp-lit street in front of him. The once pristine walls were shades of brown and what remained of the glossy white paint was clinging to whatever shred of pride they once held. There was something about the light casting shadows internally into the street that was reminiscent of an old stained Polaroid, taken on a humid day.
Not much was significant about the street, Which was why Andrew’s gaze was held by the sky, lit with powdery stars. He sighed inwardly, thinking how bland life on the ground is and what it must be like to float freely in the air.
“I want to be an astronaut,” Andrew said to his stately father who was unhappy to be sitting on his own doorstep.
“Why is that?”
“The sky is pretty”
Andrew’s father shot him a glance of exhaustion. The child was never practical, never prudent. The sky is ‘pretty’ indeed. As though this fact warranted a change of career.
“Space is vast, son. You can get lost in space.”
Andrew studied his father’s outline, glowing against the darkness of the night’s sky.
“Is that why the sky is black?” he asked.
That’s my crack at the prompt.Take a look at the original post if you’re interested in trying it out too!
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12 responses »

  1. This is a gorgeous piece of writing. I love the way you
    transition so smoothly between the boy’s dreams and the father’s
    skepticism.

    Reply
    • Thanks for the comment! I was really drawn to the bleakness of a black sky, it seemed to fit well. It’s all thanks to you and your prompts 🙂

      Reply
  2. Your words are beautiful. I loved all of it but especially loved this….”The once pristine walls were shades of brown and what remained of the glossy white paint was clinging to whatever shred of pride they once held. There was something about the light casting shadows internally into the street that was reminiscent of an old stained Polaroid, taken on a humid day.”
    Thank you!

    Reply
  3. A great short story. Your clever use of words helped me
    clearly see the boy and his father sitting on the step looking at
    the night sky. I loved the idea of the street being so dull that
    the boy’s interest and imagination were drawn skywards.

    Reply
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  5. Indigo Spider

    I agree with everything that was said already! Very well
    done, showing the joy and innocence of the little boy with the
    cynicism of an adult.

    Reply
  6. I love the line, “You could get lost in space.” What a perfect lead-in for the punch. Very enjoyable to read.

    Reply
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